Sunday, July 3, 2011

Dr. Villanelle

This was a villanelle that I wrote about a year and a half ago in my creative writing class.

Doctor Villanelle

The wounds so gruesome, the blood so red
Covers my hands, and my nice white floor
His heart rate stops, another one dead.

(A picture for your viewing enjoyment)
Blinded and bleeding, strapped to the bed
Moaning in pain, he screams “Please, no more!”
The wounds so gruesome, the blood so red.

‘Make the incision’, I say in my head
Heaving so hard, sweat pours from his pores
His heart rate stops, another one dead.

My palette and paint, morphine and meds
I’ll fix him up, right down to his core!
The wounds so gruesome, the blood so red.

It’s dangerous work, the ground I tread
Cut left, slice right, of me he implores!
His heart rate stops, another one dead.

Torn to pieces, a human salad,
I move his mauled body to the floor
The wounds so gruesome, the blood so red
His heart rate stops, another one dead.

(Note: Not all my poetry is as dark as this. I actually meant for this one to be, how you say... Humerus? Ha! A pun...)

3 comments:

  1. Glad to see you like the formals! I love formal poetry, much more than free verse.
    I like the way you tweaked the first refrain.
    Dark. Yes, but a well-executed dark.

    And always remember-
    "Do not go gentle into that good night..."

    Best-

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  2. I actually saw an entire performance of Dylan Thomas and a plethora of his works. It was mostly about his semi-insane lifestyle. You have to be a little crazy to be a good writer, I believe.

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  3. I love villanelles so much. This was really awesome, a nicely written piece.

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